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.
.
.
sour sunlight
hits
collides against the
windowpane.
drips melts disintegrates
precipitates
change.
.
..

the feeling is strange.

..
.
so much of what you thought you knew
comes out in
blood blurred words,
hummingbirds radiating towards
nectared rewards
but loosing momentum halfway.

what the hell was I going to say?

I know it was inspired,
I know it came from deep
but know not what transpired
In the gap between a feeling and a thought.

got caught up in some intranerval snot
and where words I had sought
was left with…

to hell with thought!

for deftly and with heavy breathing sounds,
consciousness in flight takes bounds!
accelerated rate confounds the mind
with droll surprise but frees the soul
and clears the eyes.

directionless breeze supplies then sways away
the aftertastes of yesterday
the yearnings for tomorrow
the time which my doubts borrow
allowing me to stay
immersed
in here
and now
in every
day.

..
.
“Attention! Attention!”
.
..

an oboe voice rejoiced
and the universe
with sides split by laughter
soundlessly voiced
lost words into my mind:

.Providence resides inside.
©2004-2009 ~AwakenAwareness
:iconawakenawareness:

Author's Comments

Heavily inspired by the novel "Island", by Aldoux Huxley, and done partially in homage to him, one of the greatest writters who ever lived.

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:iconbryianzum:
I love it. The imagery of the first few lines was explosive enough to keep my attention, and the rest of it flowed very well. I also loved the last line. Keep up the good work :+fav:
:iconkorubi-draconis:
beautiful...

--
Do not meddle in the affairs of the 1337,
For you are a n00b and easy to frag.
~so says teh Kor
:iconpeacefroggie:
I'm gonna f*cking freak out, this is just wonderful!

1. You like Huxley so you must be smart; Island is a terrific novel.
2. The language is fantastic, the rhyme is amazing, the flow...

"drips melts disintegrates
precipitates
change." (great image)

"hummingbirds radiating towards
nectared rewards
but loosing momentum halfway" (hmm, symbolism/metaphor?)

"where words I had sought
was left with naught…
it matters not!" (this sounds like something I would write)

I would compare the structure of this poem to one of those twisting little storms of ash-blossoms or dust, if that makes sense...

Anyways, congratulations on a great poem, definitely something worthy of a decent comment, and I shall certainly give it a favorite.

--
:weed: :gun: :beer: "You're not fuckin' Santa Clause, Julian, and I don't need your fuckin' cherry trees." :beer: :gun: :weed:

Fuck you Kipprusoff, ya chain-smokin ginger!
:iconawakenawareness:
As much as I hate to admit it, that kind of commentary genuinely makes me feel as giddy as a schoolgirl,..
What am I taking about, I love to admit it! I'm a schoolgirl!
-frolics in glee-

...
Ahem.
Now that that's taken care of. Thank you. Nice to meet someone who appreciates a master as much as I do.

Just wait 'till my friend ~Godbox sees this.. Island is her favorite book ever.
(you better not fail me now Lia, I just put you on the spot!)
:iconezekiel-chaos:
Pure Power. Especially the lines:

so much of what you thought you knew
comes out in
blood blurred words
hummingbirds radiating towards
nectared rewards
but loosing momentum halfway

what the hell was I going to say?




So very articulate! These few words capture the essence of your goal and form a mighty foundation for the spire of a great spell.

I always loved the purpose more than the end product 8)

Lovely.

--
Ezekiel Zelias Chaos
"Woah! Look! Deja Vu!"
:icongodbox:
"directionless breeze supplies then sways away
the aftertastes of yesterday
the yearnings for tomorrow
the time which my doubts borrow"

Wow.



All I can muster at the current moment is, amazing wording.
And that I'll have to think about this one longer...

--
"Roaring dreams take place in a perfectly silent mind. Now that we know this, throw the raft away." --Kerouac

:fusionrock:
:iconawakenawareness:
hehe, serves me right for putting you on the spot like that. I think you should refrain from saying anything else, just to spite me... :P
:icongodbox:
Don't you sass me, Mr.!
I'm the Sassmaster! Got it? ME !!!


well I guess its justified as this poem DOES deserve an infinately better comment... and might just get one deSpite you :P

--
"Roaring dreams take place in a perfectly silent mind. Now that we know this, throw the raft away." --Kerouac

:fusionrock:

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