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hammocked in Celsius heat
mosquitoes make love to me,
bare feet tender from kicking
graveled green glass

moonlight incites, turns tides
to nymphs’ beckoning glances
and samba sashays,
seduces sweat from the brow
and inflames the inside,
teases thirst from the throat,
afloat on and coated
in pheromones
I glide towards
prophetic [lips,
talk circles that
prosthetic hips’ sway
won’t imitate–

     -till soft stupored
      from lime-wedged sips and
      sincerest teeth grins
      from river imps,
      humid body knows no reason
     (not to dance)]
  
  
  
  
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©2004-2009 ~AwakenAwareness
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It's not ALL soccer and coffee...

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:iconjay-c:
there's also caipirinha and women! :D

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Jay
:iconflaery:
For the first line, should there be a comma at the end? I feel like it needs one . . .

But besides that comment . . . .

WOW! Such great words with such great rhythm. The words actually seem to dance because of your use of punctuation and your choice of words. This really worked for me. It's sexy, heated, and full of images to touch each sense.

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I adopted ~djthedj and ~ wanderingjizo through ~daac, and I unofficially adopted ~ Ariga.

:spotlight-left: Are you *featureD? :spotlight-right:

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:iconleainshadow:
good rythem, excelant imagery. only negative is the braces... feel like there's something missing, to complete the "phrophetic"
did you meen to give a sense of a crowded room, because that's what it gave me. very vivid image, colored by the photo above.

the more i read it the more i like
;)

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<f3 freedom.
:iconleainshadow:
and you know what? forget what I said about the braces. It lets the reader imagine what is going to happen, and keeps the thought going after the poem is read.

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<f3 freedom.
:iconbryianzum:
Damn, you bring about some awesome imagery with this one. Keep up the good work. :D

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If the best years are always ahead, then we will never see them.
Independance is a necessary thing sometimes... but so is codependance.
Those who know the past are still doomed to repeat it regardless.

Yeah, I'm a F\/<king philosopher all right.
:iconezekiel-chaos:
Mm, was there a party going on in your head? Very cool, especially what it all leads up to..

:boogie:

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Ezekiel Zelias Chaos
"Woah! Look! Deja Vu!"
:iconawakenawareness:
That icon expresses it pretty perfectly..

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:iconawakenawareness:
Thanks.. This was one of my more, "feel good" poems... ;)

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:iconawakenawareness:
hey, thanks for catching that.

I'm glad you picked up on the word dance. It took a long ass time till it felt right, and I still didn't know if anyone would get it.

You're cool. ;)

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